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Aw isn’t she adorable!

pinkchang responds:

oh my good finally someone comments here

The deliverance and punchline needs work, usually there’s the intro to the topic, then there’s the pause, then the punchline happens, then there’s an amplifier or reaction to the punchline.
https://youtu.be/y9i4KwPbe_w

But it has to be surprising, all of your comics I read usually lead up to something that would make sense in a chronological order as the punchline.

A strong punchline usually pulls the rug from right under your feet. You set them up with a quick topic then wham you throw them off guard with a screw ball.

For this one in particular the setup takes too long, she should of started singing by panel 2, then there would be the pause on 3 and then she gets kicked out.

Also since it’s slapstick it would be funnier if it were more violent, with an impact spark
and some sound effect text.
Maybe even some exaggeration like her flying into a trash can on the other side of the street, or flying into a car wind shield, or getting embedded into the side of someone’s house.

Comedy is hard (I should know I’m a comic artist too) But as long as you have a sense of humor that’s all you’ll need.

Dymarob responds:

I appreciate your criticisms, but the comic wasn't meant to be slapstick.

While it would have been funny for the tutor to land in a trash can or through a windshield, the punchline wasn't meant to be her getting hurt, just that she was kicked out for being a bad tutor.

Secondly, a pause wouldn't make any sense for the joke because it cuts away midsentence. Movies and TV do this without a pause all the time.

I'm also not quite sure what you mean by "The setup takes too long" considering that it's a quick 4-panel comic. Maybe it would have worked better as a 3-panel. I'm not sure.

Again, I appreciate your opinion on it, but I don't have many regrets with how I made this comic.

🎵Jenny oh Jenny🎵

Neat design! The glowing eyes sort of reminds me of Smash Bros Mega Man.

crackheadboi responds:

Actually I can see that

“Got it memorized? You better punk!”

Simply amazing! I love the Tron movies so I love this!

DanielBeltranS2 responds:

Thank you so much. I love Tron too, specially Tron: Legacy

It’s a good model but the lack of lighting lessens the quality

Pretty unique oc, I love colors and clean outlines.

NoNthings responds:

Thank you!

Woah! The style on this sprite really stands out! Good job.

Pretty adorable, but arms are out of proportion. Most arms tend to reach the characters’ pockets and the upper arm and forearm are the same length.

The shading is pretty accurate though.

SonicWackyspeed responds:

Thank you!! I'll keep that in mind for the next one

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