Very witty and creative dialogue, I also find the characters adorable too. I just wish that I got a laugh out of it.
Jokes are more than reciting what everyone knows it’s an art form with rules, tools, and structure.
The basic structure of a joke is the setup and the punchline.
A set up is when you imply a situation or tell a brief story to give an audience familiarity.
Then there’s the punchline subvert their expectations and go somewhere they didn’t expect that’s related but not obvious.
This creates surprise, the basis of all laughter.
One tip I learned is that if I’m not confident a joke lands I set the comic down until I forget it. Then come back to see if I laugh if I don’t I just scrap the joke and make a new one instead of editing it until it’s funny that never works.