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[Rolly Show Episode 2 - Battle of the Magical Muffin and Cupcake]

Rolly really needs a goal, some drive, without one there is no plot it just becomes a series of random unconnected events and there’s no way to track where the story ends or how far he’s gotten.

It seems like everyone but him has one which makes him seem more like a background character really.

Another really important piece of writing advice is to give the main character some internal conflict.
Is there something about his life that he doesn’t like? Does he have any fears? Will achieving his goal solve this internal conflict?

Without an internal conflict the character seems like
their achieving their goal for no real reason at all.

Hope this helps.

ChickenSlupree responds:

Thanks for the feedback. I do appreciate it, and I'm taking it to heart.

But, I would say give it a little time. We're only 2 episodes in. I do have plans for all the characters to develop and grow into their own personality. (including Rolly)

Stay tuned, and thanks for watching!

[Summer time]

That was pretty fun almost inspires me to get back into animation.

AngelDthe1 responds:

Thank you 🤗🤗🤗

[Mike Ehrmantraut Interviews You For A Job]

As soon as I looked at that thumbnail I knew this would be hilarious.

NobeyOne responds:

glad you enjoyed :D