thepixelizer's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Stitch cat and the bathtub]

Had no story, the dialogue wasn’t funny, the
animation was super stiff, there was no background.

And judging by the voice acting it sounds like you’re too young to even have an account here.

Advice would be to learn at least the heroes journey, or fundamentals of story telling. Like character goals, conflict, internal conflict, arcs, climax, antagonists etc.

Learn the fundamentals of animation. Like constructing, storyboards, animatics, etc.

Good animation is not letting the character stay static. Imagine how hard it would be not move a muscle for a minute.

Learn three point perspective, two point perspective, and one point perspective for the backgrounds.

For comedy practice it in real life with other people, if you have doubts about a joke, write it down forget about it and return the next day to see if you laugh, if you don’t toss it and make a new one.

And for the love of sanity stay off of Newgrounds if you’re under age.
Even adults shouldn’t see the atrocities on this site.

napkidiscool responds:

thanks for the feedback i will learn some animation an come back later

[A Stroll through Living Island! (VIDEO VER WITH MUSIC)]

His legs are swapping sides. Each foot has to complete an oval shaped path. Split it up into four key frames.

1.Contact
when both feet are on the ground and are farthest away

2.passing
when one foot is in the air and and another is on the ground and their closest to each other.

3.Contact again but the the left and right foot are mirrored in position.

4.passing again but the foot position are swapped.

STTechin responds:

Thanks for the Feedback , Animation is far from my strong suit (especially leg movement) so I'm still trying to get the hang of it!

[DEBT]

What’s the name of the city you live in, and what’s it known for?

[Fack-somniac]

The joke wasn't very surprising and has been done many of times before.
The pacing also seemed to lag on a lot too.

Facko-Newgrounds responds:

There is no joke, the plot is just, well, he can't sleep, that's it.
Just because it was done before doesn't automatically make it bad.

[Griffin's shaving cream commercial (BANNED)]

This is pretty hilarious!

[Hank Is In The Walls...]

That was one of the best lines in Blake and Son! It had me rolling!

[Chloe and Mona: Pilot (Part 1)]

The art is good and at least the main character has a goal, but in concept this is this is just a slide show, not an animation. (going to need some more frames there buddy)

You already have the main thing down “key poses” just add frames in between them.

Look up pose to pose animation on Youtube.
Also the fundamentals of animation can never lead you astray look that up too.

As for the dialogue it’s really petty and hateful.
Simply put no one feels sorry for a jerk.

In fact every character is generally grumpy and unlikable and just roasts on each other. There’s no variety.

Usually when I make character I come up with both good and bad traits, even for the villains.
In doing this it makes the characters less two dimensional and gives even the bad guys something entertaining about them.

I also didn’t laugh, good dialogue is funny.
Keep on practicing and most of all learning.

OstritchVox responds:

Chloe is supposed to be a character who we as the audience are rooting to lose, not rooting to win. The show never treats Chloe's actions as the right thing to happen especially since she fails miserably by the end of it and gets karma

[EOFS - Super Trouble]

This was really funny and wacky.

Although the characters seem pretty static when talking perhaps you can make them gesture while they’re talking.

Also there are a lot of sentences that just go off on tangents that don’t really add anything to the humor.

The lack of an overall plot made it challenging to see the entire toon through.(I did watch all of it though)

Sure there was conflict and a climax, but nobody really had a good reason to get into a battle to the death.

Sure it was explained why afterwards, but we should’ve known way earlier before the fight began.
Usually in good vs evil plots the two sides have to have conflicting goals.

Also there were so many characters taking up screen time that it was impossible to know who the main ones were.

Usually before I write a script I brain storm, all of the important parts first before I write dialogue or even start drawing.

1.I decide who the main character is

2.I decide who, what, or where the antagonist is. (Sometimes the bad guy isn’t a character, like a natural disaster or the character’s self.)

3. I come up with a goal for the main character

4. I think of a weakness for the main character, their internal conflict.

5. I make the call to action, the event that makes the main character get out of their comfort zone to want to get the goal.

6. I write the main conflict

6. the climax :when the good guy and bad guy fight.

7. And the end where I wrap up loose ends and the story.

It gets complicated having all these element inside a wall of text so I usually make a visual graph of some sort first then I write based off of that.

On the plus side the art was good, the lip syncing was perfect, the voices were hilarious, and the general concept of the plot was very silly.

TheMiamiDeSantos responds:

yo dude thank you a lot! This is the episode 6, like if somebody never watched sailor moon and just watch the episode 6 they won't get much of it's plot right away. But anyway i surely gotta improve my writting i have received some comments about it on this ep as well on others, thanks for the heads up
i will seek more people opinion about it but honestly i think those things like have a main character with a goal, a main antagonist, etc are things for movies, shounen animes, short films, etc. I don't know if it got clear but i was aiming for something like south park, beavis and butthead, family guy, simpsons, etc where the characters are more like tools to show the story as well some of it's meanings, send some messages to the viewer about the subject and ting. But thanks for the info, i have seen some other people missing that on my cartoon before, one said about the characters "they're made to fit the shitpost more than the shitpost is made to fit the characters", i think i was aiming exactly for that, but it ended up being a negative point at least for some people so i will seek more opinions about it. Anyway thanks a lot for the info, hails from brazil

[Rolly Show Episode 2 - Battle of the Magical Muffin and Cupcake]

Rolly really needs a goal, some drive, without one there is no plot it just becomes a series of random unconnected events and there’s no way to track where the story ends or how far he’s gotten.

It seems like everyone but him has one which makes him seem more like a background character really.

Another really important piece of writing advice is to give the main character some internal conflict.
Is there something about his life that he doesn’t like? Does he have any fears? Will achieving his goal solve this internal conflict?

Without an internal conflict the character seems like
their achieving their goal for no real reason at all.

Hope this helps.

ChickenSlupree responds:

Thanks for the feedback. I do appreciate it, and I'm taking it to heart.

But, I would say give it a little time. We're only 2 episodes in. I do have plans for all the characters to develop and grow into their own personality. (including Rolly)

Stay tuned, and thanks for watching!

[Summer time]

That was pretty fun almost inspires me to get back into animation.

AngelDthe1 responds:

Thank you 🤗🤗🤗